Writing tips, spelling check, and structure corrections... I'm not a native speaker so any help is appreciated. Writing is a hobby I like to practice in my spare time, but I have decided to use this experience to also improve my English skills, so again, any correction is more than welcomed. Style and content suggestions appreciated, post here any theory, idea or thoughts you have about the characters, I love a filled alert box. I will try to post regularly but I can't promise anything. I enjoy writing but only when I'm inspired.
I find that though there is a lot of description, there's too much telling than showing. I think your story could be much more entertaining if you were to describe the events that occur than to simply tell them as they come.
