MineZ Darkness Rising Comment Page

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Zero to fifty. Quite a fast start. Not much for me to go off of yet, so I will await for more content before offering more full thoughts.

One thing I will say right now though is that you should separate the dialogue that different characters say into separate paragraphs. It is difficult to follow dialogue when various characters say things in the same paragraph. That would make reading go much more smoothly.

You said that you put adventures here before. Do you mean the Roleplay forums?

Thank you for the tip. I have stoped working on this for a bit to focus on my Annihilation stories, but soon I will start work again.

Work has resumed on the story. And not on the roleplay forums.

Thanks a lot!

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