MineZ Darkness Rising Comment Page

Discussion in 'Roleplay' started by Hollow_Leg, Jul 5, 2016.

MineZ - Darkness Rising Comment Page
  1. Hollow_Leg Platinum

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    Comment here.
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  2. InquisitorEslaf Regular Member

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    Zero to fifty. Quite a fast start. Not much for me to go off of yet, so I will await for more content before offering more full thoughts.

    One thing I will say right now though is that you should separate the dialogue that different characters say into separate paragraphs. It is difficult to follow dialogue when various characters say things in the same paragraph. That would make reading go much more smoothly.

    You said that you put adventures here before. Do you mean the Roleplay forums?
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  3. Hollow_Leg Platinum

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    Thank you for the tip. I have stoped working on this for a bit to focus on my Annihilation stories, but soon I will start work again.
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  4. Hollow_Leg Platinum

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    Work has resumed on the story. And not on the roleplay forums.
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  5. hiddenbun Retired Staff

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    soooo GUD MMMM oo0OF i need more man
  6. Hollow_Leg Platinum

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    Thanks a lot!
  7. Hollow_Leg Platinum

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    We are growing close to the end of Darkness Rising! Only two more parts remain until story end

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